Close-reading B-I-N-G-O!

Common weakness #1: Avoid "he says or "he writes." 
 In the excerpt from The Mezzanine  by Nicholson Baker, he writes with an elevated refinement that is both dignified and straight-forward. http://morgan-happygolucky.blogspot.com/

Common Weakness #4: Avoid referring to "the reader."
Also, the matter of fact way Baker describes the lobby makes the reader sense that this is somewhere to not be impressed with, its an everyday occurrence. http://skullandglossbones3.blogspot.com/

Common weakness # 7: Dont write in past tense.
The language that used is not over sophisticated, yet it is neither vulgar nor blunt.
http://bookworm-days.blogspot.com/

Common Weakness # 6: Avoid verbs "use" or "shows."
In the exerpt from Cather in the Rye, J.D. Salinger, utilizes a use of simple, but complex vocabulary.
http://barrellxc2012.blogspot.com/

Favorite Analysis:
In J. D. Salinger's Catcher in the Rye, the coarsely low-level formality, barefaced connotation, and caterwauling sound convey the matter-of-fact attitude the character has towards his situation. Salinger describes the parents as "touchy as hell" but also as "nice and all" which suggests that the character cares for his parents but has to give reason for not explaining his childhood. He has no patience for small talk or background information referring to it as that "kind of crap." The skipping of details infers the apathetic regard and reluctance of speaking about the topic and telling people his story in general.
http://averagelifeofateenagebookworm.blogspot.com/

Practice Diction Analysis! (Mezzanine)

In the excpert from the Mezzanine, Nicholson Baker uses an intricate, buisness-like language which helps describe an everyday morning at the office. The connotative figurtive language assists the refined wording by adding descriptive variety throughout the prompt. With the use of his realistic descriptions, the promt was easily visualized. "Towering volumes of marble and glass" is what he saw as the lobby, which creates a clear, yet abstract vision. Writing with a language that is not quite fancy but is elevated, Baker also seems to have connotataion mixed in making his writing clinical, and elaborate.

Style mapping!

Anna Godbersen, the author of The Luxe, uses fancy, yet simplistic language which makes the story understandable. On the first page, she is introducing the life of the main character with descriptions that are simple, yet elegant making it seem more interesting. Leaning towards the denotative side, Anna uses her orante style to pull this story together. Jenny Downham, the author of the story Before I Die, is straightfoward with the way she writes the story by using a blunt, common language that is deep in description, yet easy to understand. Jenny's harsh writing style portrays a depressing, dull mood that makes the story seem realistic. Eliza minot, the author of The Brambles, has a a mature, sophisticated way of writing the story. Right away it starts out with dialogue, which is confusing, but that is probably because I only read the first page. She seems to be more connotative with her descriptions and word choices, but the story itself would more centered because it is not harsh, or musical like, it is just its own category in the middle.

Quarterly! (first quarter)

To be honest, i havnt exactly kept up with my reading! Reading is just not one of my favorite things to do, and usually i dont have time to read, most people make time to read but I struggle with just getting myself to sit down to even read a book. The challenging part is just being able to sit in one place and read a book, its just really hard for me to do that. If i do read (which isnt often), its at night because i usually fall asleep reading in my bed. The book i am reading right now is really interesting, but i still have a hard time sitting and reading it for a long period of time. The other challenging part for me is that i have to do that book project, but i have to finish the book first and i am only half way done and the sad part is that its really short (that just explains "how much" i read). I wish i liked to read though so i could get a better in this class, because this class isnt hard its just the whole reading thing thats killing me. Instead of reading. id rather watch a movie. I am more of a visual person so if there is a movie of a book i dot read the book i just watch the movie. Plus, movies are way more intriguing to me i just love watching movies! So if the assignment was to watch movies instead of read a certain amount of pages a week i would have an A+ (because i am a pretty good movie watcher)! Anyways, reading is just not my fortay (vocab word), and i just do not particularly like to read! Thats all i have to say! Have a Great day!(:
 PS:  my goal for this next quarter will be to actually try to read the assigned amount of pages!

.....this is the book i am reading!! in case you were curious on what it looked like, just your luck..its right here! enjoy the view!

Currently (updates/ sentences)!

my current updates:
books ive read : 0
number of pages i read for week 3 (quarter 2) :20
semester: 268 pages
(i don't read much..but ill work on it)

Sentences:
1. “I love you. It hurts more than anything ever has, but I do. So don't you dare tell me I don't. Don't you ever say it again!”
- Tessa is describing her love her adam, and she describes it so well that i practically fall in love with him myself. ;)
2. “Every few years we disappear, Zoey. All our cells are replaced by others. Not a single bit of me is the same as when I was last in this room.”
- Tessa knows she will die, its just a matter of when, and she pretty much accepts death.
3.“Keep breathing. Just keep doing it. It's easy. In and out.”
- Tessa has gone through so much, with the thought of death constantly on her mind, and usually breathing is to calm you down but this is the type of breathing to keep her alive.

Favorite Claims!:)

In this dance routine, the modern, pounding sound of the drums, the intence and piercing facial expressions and the alive, over the top arm movements creates a sense of fragile chemistry between two people that are desperate yet indecisive at the same time. (kelly)
      
In this Van Halen video, Right Now, their powerful and effective use of words, livelyness and alertness of the condition of the world, and the upbeat, melodic, sound creates a outspoken and thoughtful outlook on what the world has become. (morgan)
 
The Ground Zero Memorial in New York, where the Twin Towers once stood, is a sincere and gorgeous memorial for all the ones who died on 9/11. The beautiful waterfall is a wonderful and memorable idea to fill the empty spot where the towers once stood. People visit this touching, unique and magnificent memorial from all over the world.  (allie)

in this contemporary dance, choreographed by Mia Michaels, the varied confusion of the movement, pain and romance shown through the emotion, the regret expressed through the dull costume choice, and the dominating and agressive use of space create a sense of lighthearted passion between the two dancers. (Abbie)


In Bérenger's black and white photograph, his dramatic contrast and enticing depth of field draw the viewer into the picture with active negative space that elevates the shadows from the composition to illustrate an ominous and mysterious mood. (kim)

I really like kim's claim a lot because most people did a dance but she did claim on photography, and she really went into a deeper meaning of the picture along with a good description! visit her blog here at Kim's corner